tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8979955653286053763.post6010611709676595164..comments2011-05-23T12:10:22.662-07:00Comments on Writings, Rantings, and Ramblings: My First PostWriting Mommahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07769012058706172233noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8979955653286053763.post-79634190971343491872011-03-21T13:02:09.860-07:002011-03-21T13:02:09.860-07:00"The street below bent and bowed with life, b..."The street below bent and bowed with life, breathing people in and out of the buildings that lined the busy sidewalks."<br /><br />Wow. I love your writing style- quite poetic.<br /><br />Keep writing! :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8979955653286053763.post-64834389686528263512011-03-19T21:51:17.499-07:002011-03-19T21:51:17.499-07:00Wow, Joyce, you've sparked my writer juices! ...Wow, Joyce, you've sparked my writer juices! I really did do this as a one off, but you're right. There could be so much more to this. And you did hit it spot on: she's a lonely soul haunting one place, in despair because she's utterly alone. But now you have my brain quickly making a story for her, how she got there, why she can't leave, and what's going to happen to her. Thank you for the little nudge!Writing Mommahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07769012058706172233noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8979955653286053763.post-29076972664817502442011-03-18T13:05:54.851-07:002011-03-18T13:05:54.851-07:00I got the impression that she was the one doing th...I got the impression that she was the one doing the haunting and it painted a picture of dark despair. Being alone and confined to a particular place when no one can see or hear you is truly a curse. You really let us get to know this poor creature, and her plight is heart-breaking. What happened to her? Did she do something to deserve her situation? This can effectively stand alone, but it could also be part of a much larger piece. Perhaps some backstory first, then move on to more of the present? I would be very interested to see where this would go.Joycehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03275503653927579472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8979955653286053763.post-31906490624114623652011-03-13T05:54:07.588-07:002011-03-13T05:54:07.588-07:00Excellent, sad picture, I absolutely enjoyed it! T...Excellent, sad picture, I absolutely enjoyed it! There are so many opportunities you can think of here: is she alive? Is she old or. Young? Is she a human? I like the pieces that make me think, thanks for this. (Sorry for any missPellings: blackberry and blogger don't mix very well.)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8979955653286053763.post-68234372670273398502011-03-12T17:35:23.223-08:002011-03-12T17:35:23.223-08:00I don't know why this one came out as depressi...I don't know why this one came out as depressing. It just sort of decided it wanted to be. So, yeah, I suppose it's supposed to be sad. lol I took the "flash" as writing the first things that came to mind, then making sure the thoughts were coherent, so I didn't really expound. Hopefully I'll be able to do more challenges like this one and actually write a happy story. Believe it or not, I'm really a happy person. :)<br /><br />By the way, I really enjoyed your entry, too. I'm glad I wasn't the only one who saw the hotel as being haunted.Writing Mommahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07769012058706172233noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8979955653286053763.post-69114368977560533052011-03-12T17:33:13.788-08:002011-03-12T17:33:13.788-08:00Beautifully written. I felt certain she was going ...Beautifully written. I felt certain she was going to jump. Glad she didn't. :o)Julia Madeleinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02770857960024041136noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8979955653286053763.post-54565182201671393522011-03-12T17:14:15.199-08:002011-03-12T17:14:15.199-08:00God that's depressing, but I think that's ...God that's depressing, but I think that's what you were going for :) I really like the imagery of buildings as living beings making a city feeling like a flock or herd of wild animals. I appreciate that there's pretty much no fat - it's very tight.<br /><br />You can read my entry if you get bored or something :) http://paulvogtwrites.blogspot.com/2011/03/first-impressions.htmlThe Hopeless Gamerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10641907554710405444noreply@blogger.com